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''I got a little black book, with my poems in...''
                                                                Pink Floyd.

DaD
There's a world where I could get recognition
but I was always getting pushed down
I was a great kid with great ambition..
But no more Because...

I'm guilty of not breaking the silence.
So I had to get down at this young
And take the violence.
Being raped at 4 without realizing
And now I got to face him out
to be told that I was lying !

You just crossed the line
with your cocaine
It made you blind
I hope you die dad and in Vain

MoM
There's a world when I could get some affection.
But it didn't came from you.
And I know that neither did you.
but look what it happens when you're reflecting it to your son.

I know you where too young when your fathers died.
12 years old is too young to lose his familly.
But you can't kill the pain with acohol, are you out of your mind.
But Mom I've lost you much faster with your deeds.

Don't tell me I'm crazy.
Go fuck yourself!
I was different, Maybe.
but you didn't need to leave me in those cells!!

hope you kill yourself and I want to be there.
I can't do it myself it doesn't belongs to me.
Maybe,I understand, your life isn't being fair.
But You didn't had you reflect this on me.
But you did.

Myself
I ruined it too because I'm a sinner
Sex, drugs, alcohol, Juvenile prison and everything else I've passed through
I'm just the results of you father.....
........of you mother.

Epilogue--------------------------------------------------
I'm facing you but it turns that I'm facing myself ..
I got a little black book with my poems in..
you'll see, it is on the shelf..
and now.. in this new world I'll be living

At the end I still got to love you

Fuck you.
:iconrealrocka:
This is a big poem with 4 chapter including an epilogue of a suicide I've tried to commit long ago.
This letter was for everybody to know why I killed myself.
It didn't worked, the rope broked, and I wanted to less suffer.

If you read it I want you to comment it , please.
If it doesn't apply to grammatical (errors) just let me know and I be pleased to correct it (for me).
everything that I wrote actually hapenned so don't judge me, laugh about it, or simply comment that it didn't veritably happenned (because your gonna get in big shit)
...

This is the story of my life and I didn't include the one who actually, loved me and saved my life.

To final this description I want to say everything I said about them Is actually what I want them, and what I think of them.

thanks.
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:iconpoetic-chick:
This is a very deep and intense poem. Screw the grammer!! It's excellent!! I could almost feel your pain through the words.
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~IIIXandaP Jul 14, 2008  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Bah a couple grammar faults but its great in general :).

Well, that's about all I have to say, keep it up.
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:iconsynith:
I'm not sure what to say on this since it's personal. I'd give it a critq, but I think it wouldn't be appropriate given the nature of this.

I wish you the best in life. I know what it's like because I've been at the state you were at many a time. Something somewhere keeps me breathing. Perhaps it's in the air, or the look elderly men give me, or a kind gesture from a stranger, or hug from a loved one. Something out there. Somewhere.

Much love for this.

Synith.
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:iconleftmehollow:
Props dude, but you should look it over and fix the spelling errors. Keep it up!
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:iconsosaxy:
Wow. That's a very intense poem. It's got a lot of anger in it and when i read it i got these mixed emotions of smug "i win, you lose" feelings and then a realization of the fact that to face them and get back at them you had to face yourself too. I like it a lot. Good Job.
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~ReAlRocKa Jul 13, 2008   Writer
thank for your comment
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:icondoki-kunai:
wow man, thats some deep shit. all I can say is I hope things are different now. well written
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:iconsullenexile:
other then the few grammar errors. I think its good. very heart felt and painful. but still well done.
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~ReAlRocKa Jul 13, 2008   Writer
thanks but I know you knew the story
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